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5 | 83.33% |
| Nelson Mandela |
  
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1 | 16.67% |
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04-13-05, 11:24 PM
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stanza vs Nelson Mandela
IP: 28AD 5545
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10-15 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting THE TOPIC IS: FINAL RUN Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 04-13-05 at 11:54 PM Must drop verse in 1500 minutes after check in. |
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04-13-05, 11:25 PM
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
Nelson Mandela has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-13-05 11:25 PM.
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04-13-05, 11:33 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
Stanza has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-13-05 11:33 PM.
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04-13-05, 11:49 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 0825 899A
Final Run Im at the end and yet still I see no signs of victory within Maybe it is Defeat that is waiting for me At The end This is it I can barely go on like this struggle & gasping for air I dont see my completion or my place rest...but yet its there if its not in the past & not in the future how is it present? These question got me pondering and answers im guessing Hold off on the delays I can Finaly See my mark of Prize My place of strength and my place of rest but yet... Surprise I Open my eyes only to see the harsh and cruel real vision I was headed in the wrong direction my senses were missin This was a time of prayer so I feel down on my bending Knee And I began to Beg the God above for his merciful Peace Then The Sky was Broken and I seen My ending Place My Final run Was over Thanx to God's Wonderful Grace |
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04-14-05, 03:21 PM
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
Final Run:
*Slave: We have to do something brothers im tired of...* Generations of hurt faces, painfully patient, jus waiting for eyes of hatred to realize slaves are mistaken tried escaping, but the death toll remains steadily updatin *This is it our final run, rise with thy heart not thy fist* one last chance at freedom spoken with words of truthful meaning our final run even those whose life is yet to begun.soul leakin,still leading holdin, the torch to light the way for those even blinded by greed even though working on plants doesnt give us food for the mouths we feed last shot to cease the deadly risk we take to survive this state of time our state of mind is set abroad the faithful shine from eyes of the honestly forgiving, unsinningly fufilling this final rise mistreated,beated abused and left bleedin,die from feeling souls risin through the ceiling,screamin 4 emotional healing *Holds the torch high to lead the way for the next generation*
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04-14-05, 03:31 PM
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Odi et Amo
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This was feedback posted for Nelson Mandela
IP: 7F2E 55A4
Beautiful piece, your approach of the topic was so powerful and strong. You found an excellent balance in your vocab, not too basic and yet not too complex. The imagery was amazing, you managed to paint a great picture of the situation. The emotion was so pure, so raw. Flow was coo as well as structure. I just like how you worded everything, you have a very nice writing style. One of my favo lines was this: "*This is it our final run, rise with thy heart not thy fist*"
Great piece!
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04-14-05, 04:28 PM
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IP: A624 9A1C
Voted For: Nelson Mandela
Emotion- Coo man i felt the Emotion in this verse, str8 up good. Vocab-Upp your vocab man, so it'll make you verse decent. Imaginary- YOU had a hella good imaginary my friend keep that up Concept- I think you should've approach the topic more different, not ZOOM into the story that quick. But this a good drop, good flow, with good imaginary. Upp your vocab and your emotion A little. But i think you got this battle. G-luck on the polls Vote removed
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04-14-05, 04:29 PM
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IP: A624 9A1C
Ahhhhhhh that should be a feedback my fault..........................I'll pm strobe
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04-14-05, 05:05 PM
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IP: 28AD 5545
iight iight get it removed and dont do it again or i will send you to america again....lmao.....anywayz UPPPIN THIS MUH FUCKIN BATTLE YALL
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04-14-05, 09:01 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 3240 794D
Yeah Get that Shit removed ...................... Thanx
Uppin |
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04-14-05, 10:45 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
uppin uppin uppin uppin...........................
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04-14-05, 10:50 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 3240 794D
Damn No replies for me?
I must be wack ass hell  Damn |
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04-15-05, 05:09 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
uppin dis battle fuckers..........................
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04-15-05, 06:05 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 3240 794D
upupupupupupupupupupupuppupupupupupupupupupupupupu pupup
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04-16-05, 12:13 AM
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IP: 989C F949
Voted For: Stanza
stanza Im at the end and yet still I see no signs of victory within Maybe it is Defeat that is waiting for me At The end ^^IGHT OPENER This is it I can barely go on like this struggle & gasping for air I dont see my completion or my place rest...but yet its there ^^NICE LINE if its not in the past & not in the future how is it present? These question got me pondering and answers im guessing ^^DECENT Hold off on the delays I can Finaly See my mark of Prize My place of strength and my place of rest but yet... Surprise ^^IIGHT I Open my eyes only to see the harsh and cruel real vision I was headed in the wrong direction my senses were missin ^^LIKE IT This was a time of prayer so I feel down on my bending Knee And I began to Beg the God above for his merciful Peace ^^GOOD LINE Then The Sky was Broken and I seen My ending Place My Final run Was over Thanx to God's Wonderful Grace ^^PRETTY GOOD CLOSURE STANZA- I LIKED MOST OF UR VERSE. THERE WAS ALOT OF TOUGHTFUL VOCAB INVOLVED AND I LIKED THAT. THE STRUCTURE WAS NICE AND EASY TO READ. JUS NEED TA ELEVATE A LIL BIT MO HOMIE N U GON B STR8 8.5/10 NELSON MANDELA Generations of hurt faces, painfully patient, jus waiting for eyes of hatred to realize slaves are mistaken tried escaping, but the death toll remains steadily updatin ^^VERY GOOD OPENER *This is it our final run, rise with thy heart not thy fist* one last chance at freedom spoken with words of truthful meaning our final run even those whose life is yet to begun.soul leakin,still leading ^^O.K holdin, the torch to light the way for those even blinded by greed even though working on plants doesnt give us food for the mouths we feed ^^DECENT LINE last shot to cease the deadly risk we take to survive this state of time our state of mind is set abroad the faithful shine from eyes of the honestly forgiving, unsinningly fufilling this final rise ^^NICE LINE REALY LIKIN IT mistreated,beated abused and left bleedin,die from feeling souls risin through the ceiling,screamin 4 emotional healing ^^AVERAGE CLOSURE NELSON MANDELA- I LIKED UR VERSE AS WELL. THIS WUZ A VERY CLOSE BATTLE B/W BOF OF U, I LIKED UR LYRICAL DICTION AND THOUGHTFUL LINES. UR STRUCTURE WUZ NICE AND EASY 2 READ. U R REAL GOOD AT TOPICALS BUT I THINK HE HAD U BEAT NO HATE AT AL B/C U R REAL GOOD. 8/10 VERY VERY VERY CLOSE BATTLE BUT MY V GOES 2 STANZA V/STANZA CUD U PLEASE RTF IN DA BATTLE IN MY SIG W/AN HONEST VOTE THANX!
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