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Old 04-28-05, 11:47 PM   #4
Kawn Flixx
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Hmm.. This was a decent piece..
really needs to be worked on...
Next time elevate on vocab, use more emotions..
Some nicer wordplay, You also got to try to line up your bars
and not just make fillers instead of punchlines..
Overall needs improvement ,
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