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Evolution
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IP:
Voted For: Doe Bagz
ight not a bad battle here both of you got mad potential...
MaD_KnighT
Fuck me, u got fuck all money so go change ya name.........
Cuz u jus da same old bitch dat never touched da game.....
^ nice opener name play and ight punch
U never be as good as Knight cuz u never spat at da top table.......
Time to break both ya legs in one cuz u already sound disable........
^ nice second line couldav been worded better
With the slick lines spittin greasy I'll blow this bitch breezy...
Cuz you jus take my place in iLLunaTiKs id get it back easy……..
^ he aint take your place u left lol
Ok we getting to da end but this is were da massacre begins……..
Because even ya homies know dat ur losses are my wins……….
^ decent personal and decent closure
overall u have elevated since your last battle... you had some ight punches in there... nothing too special, but u did good... like i said last time try to word your punches better, go for creativity aswell, you will go far if u do that shit... not a bad verse overall jus keep spittin and you'll get the hang of it....
Doe Bags...
iight nigga, i'll do dis rematch shit wit no problem
u only livin on dis earth cuz i fucked witta cheap condom
^ wored alryyt played concept thought... had potential
and lets get dis understood dat my record aint shit
but im gone try not to lose again like dis bitch
^^ ight personal, couldav been worded better though
my bad white boy, dont go all "collibine" on me
show up to my school wit yo water A-K's and .40s
^ its columbine lol... nice concept not played decent punch
u wanna battle me again?, what type of shit u on?
ya du-rag and fitted must be on too tight, poser be gone
^ this a fake personal i dnooo
now lets talk about crews...what roster u currently on?
i dont know cuz u run through crews like blood in tampons
^^ haha witty line this had me laughin nice one
dis lil fella tryin to act hard in forums but in real life he hide
fuckin broke ass junkie..yo poser type ass dont need rap, stay on pimp my ride!
^^ not a good closure stretched seconed line...
ryyt overall u had a couple of decent punches in there... you just need to focus on your flow and structure match that up before you start on your punches... when u got your flow n structure worked out start to thuink of some witty lines not played but just try... not a bad verse though
i ainht votin coz they both my homies... pz hope this helps
Crew vote removed
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