I see you mainly focussed on the sound expression and the multis in this piece and kinda let the story itself disappear on the background. It's not a real emotional or imagery piece, just a flowbomb. Flow was real good due to the similar sound expressions, vocab was good as well as your structure. I don't see much of a story though, I mean I think I kinda do but it's confusing lol...

Good work on them multis though...

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