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Old 05-28-05, 11:25 PM   #5
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From: Bmore, Murderland
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meh

intro..was ok...

flow is what stands out..it could prolly be way betta...what u should do is just read ya lyrics til u memorize them..then that will help wit ya flow and delivery..ckuz i can tell ya readin..oo yea..that reverb is to heavy too...lyrically...it was ok..coulda been way betta lyrically..the personals u have u gotta make them relate to somethin else for them to really hit hard..like make them a punchline...not just sayin what she does....

for a diss track..i dont see this as makin her feel bad...or even wantin to come back at u...if u wooulda made the personals hit harder, then maybe..
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