this was a real deep piece, your vocab usage was on point and although at first glance i thought your structure was off....as i began to read i caught on to the flow. i loved the imagery you used and the powerful lines

a small glimps thru a window allows the sight of smoldering rain
I strongly carry myself on my back to shoulder the pain

Un-doublty I have served this punishment in previous time
A hear a gaurd say "it wont be painfull" , Im not beliving his lie
laying back,im praying that power surges strengthen me to break these chains
"Is it possible to pretend to die? I doubt I can fake these pains

^^^just a few lines that i felt stood out.....nice job fam 9/10

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