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Evolution
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IP:
Voted For: Dizzee Rascal
ight u wanted feed man so here is some feed for ya:
Tired of fucking ho's, ya wackness shows, that your whole careers is fable
So, Naming ya clothes, is the only time celerity able to sign a label
^^ nice concept it couldav been worded a bit better tho
ya seem strange cus, like physcho porn stars i maime pus
Quick to aim cus? Disect this herb with a B/bee still wouldn't be famous..
^^ i dont really get that, maybe you should explain
Too slick for ya fate ho, Hit ur face wiv the str8 atleast ur revival hood splits
Prick ill str8 blow up your temple like suicidal buddhists
^^ lol this was good.. try to match up syllable count though
Hope ya dont choke, embarrassed so much go ahead try and gloat
Ima showboat, throwing Cell 'of verse' how i break this choir boys throat
^^ ok i spose not really a hard hitting punch
Prove verbal abuse, decapitate any bystanders to crews aint for you
End this feud, the way i contain cell voters yelling "CELL-U-LOSE/CELLULOSE"*
^^ nice closure this was dope... good wording aswell...
ight well here is the breakdown::
i feel that you have alot of potential u got alot of skills that are wating to be released or sum shit... try to work of your syllable count for a start so the structure is good and it flows, other than that i cant really direct you on punches coz you already heading in the right direcrtion... be original when it comes to thinking of punches so you dont get hated on till they are played, remember to word your punches good so they come out even doper... ight hope this helps... i aint gonna vote coz its too close to call fam g'luck pzzzz
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