word, this was definately different.....you seem to really have a handle on your vocab, which definately highlights this drop...it was used very effectively and really brought out strong emotion....imagery was great in the last paragraph.....but i do feel that at times, you really force the vocab, and takes alot away from the overall flow and enjoyment level to read.......none-the-less though, a very sophisticated drop and you really seem to have alot of talent, great knowledge too of language, cause you used some awesome descriptive words, definately keep up, this was a good piece, i'll probly read it again later.........nice story too, good original idea

check out me and OSB's new piece, when you get the chance, if ya could be so kind, thanks

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