^^WOW...i really hope that you didnt just say this open mic was bad...and then put those lyrics in your sig?
anyway
antm@c...feeds comin slow uh?this was actually good if you only started writing in may.The structure was pretty much perfect,i agree the concept was kinda played,but never the less you did it well.Try adding a lil wordplay in there and try using better vocab.But you'll naturally pick that up as you write more stuff.overall to say you only started in may,you got alot of potential.Keep droppin stuff on here and you will get some feedback that will help,you just gotta keep askin for feed.Theres some excellent topical heads on the site which you can learn from.So keep droppin homie,good piece.wun