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this was a close and decent battle people... i didn't realise daz did topicals lol...
daz:
this was a dope piece of writing you had good emotion vocab was dope multies were dope flow and structure were all good fam... nothing wrong wit your verse what so ever... here is a couple lines i felt that stood out from the rest:
Biased upon ways, we were only singular in decay…. Till religion was made,
The decision was laid, the last man standing a-cross, was to pay for our trade,
^^ deep lol this was dope, talking bout jesus good job
nos:
ight man your verse was dope also if u started your verse how it finished i believe you would'av won it... the only thing i didn't like in your verse was the opener i wasn't feeling it at all... other than that your emotion was real good multies were there and your vocab was decent... like i said if the first line was better you wouldav got this, flow and structure was also on point throughout this peice, here is a line i think stood out from the rest:
I believe that the light rays, help us understand the immortal..
The next level, we might stay, or only dip our hands in this portal..
^^ this was dope i was picturing this whikle i was reading it lol... real good man
v/ daz for staying consistant going deeper into the topic and staying in there wit more emotion...
hope this vote is ok i never usually vote on topicals lol pz and no hate