Voted For: artÃ-stica~Mente

damn tweety u got this batle easy your first stanza or w/e u call em merked the other guys... no offence man.. but still.

h-n-i-c:

i think u are new to topicals if you are then i aint gonna shout lol i thought this was good for a new topical, emotion was there, vocab wasn't that good and i lost track about 2 times in your verse, you need to work on your structure coz it was messed up... other than that it was ok, you will elevate with some time just keep practising man you'll get it soon.

Tweety:

dam son this shiot was deep lol, almost depressing i liked the way u flipped it with the mother and daughter shit that was good... emotion was realll deep in this one and your vocab was good aswell... your my new favourite topical writer after this one man, good job with this here is a line that i think stood out from the others...

The blood leaked from her face, the ribs showing that she hasn't eaten for days
I knew I regret this, by not looking between the "she deserve it" catch phrase
^^ this was deep and dark, like she been neglected

real dope verse fam good loooks pz

v/ tweety for having a deeper/ better verse had a better understanding of the topica and also had better vocab...

pz no hate

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