Voted For: Compose

ight man u got this easy... no offence tonygreen i just felt that compose was deeper..

compose:

ight i liked your verse alot fam... u got a good understanding of the topic and u showed emotion, the flow was good and the vocab was real good, i liked the fact that you split it up into 3 different sections that was dope, i think u went deep into it which is a really good thing coz it made me interested in what u had to write and all i can say really is that it was dope... here is one bar i think stood out from the rest:

This couldnt be a story someone thought was movin...
its not love...its the definition of someone whos inhumane
^^ right there like a deffinition... was dope

you did a good job in this man keep droppin em...


tony green:

i can see you took a different approach to the subject, it was deep but the vocab wasnt good, it got alot better as it got to the end.. the last line is the deeped line which showed alot of emotion man... i liked that you took a different angle to it, usually it works but this time i'm afraid it didnt compose just had a better verse... try to get better understanding of your topics so u can go deeper express your mind and use some good vocab

here is your best line:

And before she drove off to have her night of fun.
I'll never forget she looked back and said I love you son
^^ they the last words? that was real deep man...

overall i liked your verse but it wasnt as deep as composes sorry fam...

rtf! link in the sig pick any of em... pz n no hate keep droppin em

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