this was straight fam...all three came nice with there verses...
Macca - good verse...structure was good...emotion was ok...nice ryming scheme..,first open mic ive probaly read of yours.Ill deffo check more out....keep it up...
Atticus - What can i say...vocab is crazy once again...structure was good...the way you use the vocab just leaves a really complexed and deep verse...the best verse out of the three...you still one of the bestat topicals...still got the best vocab...and you keep gettin better...keepem comin....
revelation - hmm..this your second piece i read today.Solid drop again...dunno if i read your stuff before.Maybe you just got a name change or somethin?...anyway another good verse...finished it well.Good structure and vocab,nice emotion in there too.I dont think your lines were stretched to be honest...just your structure was a lil different to the other two.I had no problem readin it though...
overall this was a good open mic...ill bge sure to check more of your stuff...keep em comin....
This is idyllic by the way..return the favour plz...wun
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