This wasnt bad..both had good verses and had some nice lines. Heres a bit of a breakdown..

Gong- You came pretty good. You opened alright and had a really good set of vocabulary. You def took the vocab category without a doubt. Your verse had a few flaws though. Some of your lines didnt really follow the topic that well.

I remember walking, on a trivial boardwalk of condescension
Contemplating my comprehension…of first impressions

Now, I understand where you were trying to get at with following the topic here but it didnt work that well. You should have changed the content to make people feel the emotion better and the line would have came off good.

Revelation- You came really nice in this. I was feeling your emotion throughout your entire piece and your words helped that shit out alot. Good shit and your lines were good. You also had a few good pieces of imagery in there. I think I liked your opener the best though..

Dusty streets and windy corners darkness covers land,
While dogs bark, and children cry, dice are shot by man.

I was really feeling the emotion here, good shit.

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Overall Rev took this because Gong had some bad wording in some places. Both came good though, stay up.

Vote- Revelation

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