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Old 07-11-05, 11:16 AM   #48
Maximus
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Voted For: Mimesis

You not a gangsta, ya 'lifestyles' like 'condomns', all about 'safety'
U aint convincing, you hella 'skinny', so we kno u aint 'taste beef'
^Meh, not much of a punch, nice setup on the first line but second was wackness...
U scrambling out shots, so we kno 'mimesis' searching for fame
43 wins from herbish lame but yo 'semi-mis' me just like your name
^Gun talk = gay as fuck, keep that garbage outta your verse man, it iwll be your downfall.
U can't catch up to me, I'm fast....u should take a lil rest
I'll snatch ya tongue out, then throw it back to u, so u'll catch ya breathe
^Doesn't make too much sense. Throwing a tongue at him wouldn't make him catch it breath, i see why you were trying to take it but it didn't really work.
cut my brain to see my thought, theres yo advantage bitch
u could put yo feet where yo asshole is, and still wont run shit
^Alright I guess, first like was a filler so it was preetty weak overall...
i think u should put a knife in yo rhyme book, and when you spit, we'll fear it
cause even witta mouth full of 'peanuts', you wouldnt be 'roastin' lyrics
^Best line in your verse, but still not too great

You have potentiol and what not but you didn't spit enough hard hitting punches to take him down, and uh, gun talk = gay as i said. That shits not gonna get you a win on the real, It doesn't make him look stupid. Just makes you look fake. Add some humor in your verse as well.

Fuck bluffing skills.. cant run a crew.. accept that you be nothing
Cause you can't be a Living Legend until you succeed in SOMETHING
^Nice opener, nothing too special but compared to his it was.
I'm dumping your shit son.. and now everybody's watching see,
It's like I'm talking in third person the way I'm just dropping M-E
^Clever. Could have been setup better but still dope. Made me laugh too.
You be garbage.. I'm typin hotness while you be waiting son
Cause after I urn my win.. I'll just put your damn remains in one
^Clever aswell but I've seen the same punch before, nothin too great but like i said, compared to his you're eatin him.
You suck son.. with your fake sig.. fag, get to walkin dude
Now you're the best kept secret?
..Man, it's just cause nobody wants to talk to you
^haha, Funny, pretty good bar....
Flocking to dr.. but ill still lay the smack down, nobody be lovin you
Fuck, I ain't buying wrestling leagues but I'll still take the ECW
^Pretty good and shit

Overall you owned him. Nice too see humor in a verse and what not, and no gun talk, basically a onesided battle and shit. Not really much to explain besides M-Eazy came weak and Mimesis didn't. (though your verse seem bullshit compared to some of your other)
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