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07-01-05, 03:29 PM
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I Am My Own Worst Enemy./OSB'n Drakel
IP: 9E2F CDE8
OSB = Purple
Drakel = Blue ___________________________________ I am my own worst enemy....take a look.... Ashaming myself... Claiming I've felt bliss and appeared, Maiming my health... Blaming this hell for the glistening tears, Remaining so stealth... Making a spell for the listening ears, For fame and the wealth... Ashames me to tell all my sickening fears, Been aiming to help... Changing myself cause i've given it years, Nor tame or rebel... Stupidity comes easily, I envision it clear, Thoughts come greedily... Game won't excel if I'm living in fear, Speak truth but noones ever willing to hear, Ain't that ironic, Almost like me drinking from wine glasses but the filling is beer, Mind state is gloomy... And the night air is chilling and sheer, Candle lit flames illuminating my ora... It's making a story, Why explain my defects when this verse is creating it for me, Waiting to sore free... Forsaken my glory....... Timing it all, Trust too much until my enemies rise like vines climbing the wall, Stars are lighting my path... To a man lost they're paving the way, I'm Laying awake... Absorbing the moon and its radiant rays, Praying for days for no depression... I can't stand another, Ya'll don't understand, but you will when this canvas' colored, Only escape from myself is losing my past in the gloom and mist, Or sitting at the table as I grab a pen... and move my wrist... looking back on my life, i wish i found the time to write rhymes of guidance that my children could find and expand their minds, eyes wide, recline and unwind find the warmth of a father's love, entwined in the sublime of sunshine but i never was that kind, ignored signs to unravel the hype stayed oblivious in my core, even though the apple was ripe the world continued to elapse, my past making persistent visits future swirling to collapse, digging holes, leaving consistent divots imbedded in my soul, the chances i neglected are taking a concise toll protected my hold on life, controlled vise never let the dice roll so i stroll silently.......crippled to the blind eyes of society slipping slowly in my mind......dipping in and out of sobriety not a sight to see, passion for writing, eternally turning to anxiety driving me towards internal infernos while death's hand is guiding me i stand motionless, hands skilled geysers waiting till emotion hits thoughts fill with the gift of rhythm, vains spill desire, my devotion shifts broken wrists heal, ideals evolve concealed truths, ink reveals unspoken myths feel my rage through endless pages, resolve my disputes with open fists just to find hope in this....the art im creating, im fading more each day music instates a light...shading me from what waits beneath the grey ____________________________________
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this world is a drug, and everyone's selfish FLY FREE Last edited by Drakel : 07-01-05 at 03:33 PM. |
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07-01-05, 03:37 PM
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Don't Even Think About It
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IP: 1CA5 73AB
Both verses were filled with emotion...Imagery was amazing, and the way you both explained the topic and layed everything out was genious. Vocabulary was really good. This is without a doubt Hall Of Fame material. You two never cease to amaze me. Im loving this.
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07-01-05, 03:43 PM
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IP: AB23 98FF
Damn.... This is def. OM of the July... I don't need to see anything else. Fuck.
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07-01-05, 04:46 PM
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
Quote:
ay, i was going to say that 
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07-01-05, 05:39 PM
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IP: 245A 1F1E
nice drop, both did great drop, both flowed well together and one of the better collab's i've read on here, keep em comin
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 i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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07-01-05, 11:04 PM
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
uppin.....................................
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07-02-05, 10:20 AM
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IP: AB23 98FF
Hmmm. Uppin....
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07-02-05, 01:10 PM
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IP: C23B 6D47
These are truely two very impeccable pieces of art. The visual aids that were used to explain the emotions behind these pieces was by far my favorite aspect of both. It allowed the individuallity of each to show through while indulging in a shared point of veiw. When I saw the title I had to check it out because I have a similar idea behind a piece I did awhile back, not in here I'm all new to this. So hope you can appreciate a little feed back from a newbe. Mad props go out to ya!
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07-02-05, 02:29 PM
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
^ thank you!
feed is definately appreciated...uppin
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07-02-05, 04:41 PM
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IP: AB23 98FF
Uppin.... People sleep. Alot.
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07-02-05, 07:02 PM
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
no shit eh.....btw, who are you jameson
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07-03-05, 01:48 PM
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
jameson?........
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07-03-05, 02:10 PM
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IP: AB23 98FF
I'm just a young buck fron Sid City mate.
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07-03-05, 03:47 PM
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
i dont really care.
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07-03-05, 05:51 PM
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IP: AB23 98FF
 why don't you you? |
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