Originally Posted by Wes City

ok listening to life of a legend.

flow/rhyme scheme-ok ya flow is on point, but its not smooth, its choppy in some points ex. instead of saying i have mon-ey.... say i have money. jus smooth it out a bit more polish it up. rhyme scheme is basic a/b style.....

delivery/riding beat- ok i was impressed with you on this track....usually ya real quiet, but ya delivery was pretty good i was feelin it a little...riding the beat you did this well....even in ya verse you rode the beat well...see leady on his chorus he rode the beat, and didnt jus spit a couple bars over and over. you rode the beat well chorus was some what catchy....delivery can be worked on and tweaked

pronounciation/breathe contro- ok this is the same as leady pretty much...it may just be the "american heads" but most of the time i have no fuckin clue what ya saying...i find i cant understand the rhymin word really. sometimes i slur my rhymin words too.....or your accent is jus fuckin with me....WORK ON PRONOUNCIATION. ....breathe control for the most part its good, jus before the hook i could hear you inhale. but mixing can fix that...

style/lyrics- ok ya didnt try and imitate anyone so style for now you are pretty straight, i can tell ya still trying to find ya own style to settle into....lyrics they were pretty good considering you were telling a story instead of goin for punches....overall the lyrics were good for this story, they were a lil corny at times but overal pretty straight

what to work on - smoothen out ya flow, work on ya lyrics a lil bit.....work on announciation.....speak clear....