damn gurl i really like this, good stucture nice flow, but something you could use work on is emotion use that more then just once and awhile its really important to have. having it may or may not make the flow better but most times it gives more interest but the imagery is very good and the vocabulary is veyr good as well, overall i'm feelin this your a good writier fiya, keep that shit up i love readin ya shit. listening to ya shit is good as well.

rtf in my new om Confessions links in the sig..

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