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Old 07-19-05, 12:33 PM   #1
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“…Lean not towards your own understanding.”
-Proverbs 3:5

Intro
It’s not coincidental that sight and sound tend to match in basic symmetry
The same sounds that make our ears tingle can open our eyes wide vividly
The senses help guide in the straight path splitting those that are abnormal
We feel things from the tips of our fingers and hear sounds of paranormal

Floating Words
You won’t meet her directly ’cause you won’t look for her like phone calls
from friends out far, nor green lights for cars.. not even speech for the jaws
they say she don’t exist, it’s a belief you seen it because of those with faith
not the things you see and hear everyday from ringing bells, babies or trains..
but the disabled r able to wait and depend on her, to follow the hands to obey
only at the end will you read this the right way, mute words she will convey
she communicates disregarding class and culture, thoughts boiling into tests
like the lips of Judas revealed Christ, weak judgment blossoms the blessed
& to know someone so sensational can be aware with ears overtly immature
she’s lured by lifelines in palms of this sincere companion, it’s quite secure...
...submitting her pure comprehension of verbs, subjects, n subordinate clauses
common people only imitate, replace the translation using periods for pauses
but we fall into complex traps, willing to convert back to her we attempting to fly
we pivot back to what’s known, being ignorant we go on and on like clocks time
our hands switch position like gestures, for one to understand we’ll exaggerate it
Every word is in the eye of the beholder, writing insults her…Ms. Sign Language


---The conflict in this topical is how people can Write and produce floating words (concrete)... vs. how people can use symbols to produce symmetrical floating words (abstract).---

I wrote this as a topical battle for today, but I would like regular feed in this forum... Because this is my favorite piece I have written, by far.
Thanx much...
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Old 07-19-05, 12:59 PM   #2
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Old 07-19-05, 01:48 PM   #3
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Yur So Kewl..This Was Very Well Written..Yur Opening Statement Was Good..Cuz I've Never Really Thought About Sight and Sound Matching...I Loved The Way Yu Described Sign Language...Yu Are Very Good With Imagery...

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but we fall into complex traps, willing to convert back to her we attempting to fly
we pivot back to what’s known, being ignorant we go on and on like clocks time
our hands switch position like gestures, for one to understand we’ll exaggerate it
Every word is in the eye of the beholder, writing insults her…Ms. Sign Language

loved this part of it...last line was sick...and Realli put the icing on the cake in this piece.....


I've really onli seen in good detail Yur battling skillls....So its nyce to see that u can write too,.....This was a good Piece....Some Of The Better In Depth I've Read In Here

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Old 07-19-05, 01:55 PM   #4
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thanx i appreciate the feed...
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Old 07-19-05, 07:12 PM   #5
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upping............................................ .........................................
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Old 07-19-05, 10:36 PM   #7
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liked this, good topic, took a while to figure out what the meaning behind it was, but after i read the bottom i got it, flow was good, vocab was pretty good also, emotion was good too, keep it up
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Old 07-19-05, 11:02 PM   #8
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the hidden message =

"only at the end will you read this the right way, mute words she will convey"

that's one of the most important lines of this, it shows to prove how many people can read something but look over it, like it's unimportant.. but with sign language you have to focus on every single thing.

thanx for the feed on my works. i really appreciate it.
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Old 07-19-05, 11:43 PM   #9
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Damn girl this shit was deep as hell it made me think and I don't usually think alot it made me realize on how I don't usually concentrate on what people are telling this was hot keep doing what you do you truely are The Princess of The CHI!
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Old 07-20-05, 01:28 AM   #10
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Damn ma this was a tight peice.. i was really feeling it ..vocab and wordplay were on point..nice very well educated words... good emotions and nice feeling going into your drop.. see that it took alot of time to make..Structure was good.. you had a good hidden message..and i was really feeling this peice.. nice job fiya..keep it up
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Old 07-20-05, 11:09 AM   #11
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thanx...
uppin''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''' '' hee hee
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Old 07-20-05, 08:56 PM   #12
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damn gurl i really like this, good stucture nice flow, but something you could use work on is emotion use that more then just once and awhile its really important to have. having it may or may not make the flow better but most times it gives more interest but the imagery is very good and the vocabulary is veyr good as well, overall i'm feelin this your a good writier fiya, keep that shit up i love readin ya shit. listening to ya shit is good as well.

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Old 07-29-05, 02:46 PM   #13
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Originally Posted by ~Lady Fiya~

“…Lean not towards your own understanding.”
-Proverbs 3:5

Intro
It’s not coincidental that sight and sound tend to match in basic symmetry
The same sounds that make our ears tingle can open our eyes wide vividly
The senses help guide in the straight path splitting those that are abnormal
We feel things from the tips of our fingers and hear sounds of paranormal

Floating Words
You won’t meet her directly ’cause you won’t look for her like phone calls
from friends out far, nor green lights for cars.. not even speech for the jaws
they say she don’t exist, it’s a belief you seen it because of those with faith
not the things you see and hear everyday from ringing bells, babies or trains..
but the disabled r able to wait and depend on her, to follow the hands to obey
only at the end will you read this the right way, mute words she will convey
she communicates disregarding class and culture, thoughts boiling into tests
like the lips of Judas revealed Christ, weak judgment blossoms the blessed
& to know someone so sensational can be aware with ears overtly immature
she’s lured by lifelines in palms of this sincere companion, it’s quite secure...
...submitting her pure comprehension of verbs, subjects, n subordinate clauses
common people only imitate, replace the translation using periods for pauses
but we fall into complex traps, willing to convert back to her we attempting to fly
we pivot back to what’s known, being ignorant we go on and on like clocks time
our hands switch position like gestures, for one to understand we’ll exaggerate it
Every word is in the eye of the beholder, writing insults her…Ms. Sign Language


---The conflict in this topical is how people can Write and produce floating words (concrete)... vs. how people can use symbols to produce symmetrical floating words (abstract).---

I wrote this as a topical battle for today, but I would like regular feed in this forum... Because this is my favorite piece I have written, by far.
Thanx much...



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Old 07-29-05, 02:51 PM   #14
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why thanx but i don't get much credit in topicals... I appreciate that much.. thanx Narc for peeping this..
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Old 07-29-05, 03:56 PM   #15
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yup yup uppin..
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