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Old 08-01-05, 04:02 PM   #10
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Dont Listen To Any Of Them...
05 Knows Nothing Of Leaving Feedback On O.M.'s...

This Piece Was Really Lacking...
It Didnt Have Direction, Or A Storyline...
It Was Just Random Punch Type Brag Bars...
But None Of The Punches Were That Strong...

The Flow Was Boring...
Only One Syllabol End Rhyms And That Was It...
No Internals, Multies, Ect...
None Of That Was Aparent In This Piece...

And Your Structure Was Unstable...
You Used One Format In The First Half And Another In The Second...
Wich Could Work, Cuz Its Like You Showing Your Diversity...
But The Second Format Was Stretched Lines...
Wasnt All That Good, But Keep At It Mayn...
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