Not a bad drop at all bro. Your topic was good. Sorta some Tupac - Changes shit. But you mixed it up and it went well. What you did lack though was some indeph writing. You basically told me the outskirts of what happened. Go deeper. The deepest you can and youll have an amazing OM. Your flow was good. Your emotion was there but could have been felt more. Imagery was decent. Still needed some work. Vocab wasnt half bad. Work on that. You have the basics of a good OM down. Now go deeper into it and make it amazing. Keep writing and youll get it down. Especially your rhyme scheme. Work on using internals to flow better. Keep elevating and writing.

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