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Old 08-26-05, 08:48 AM   #26
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Black Poet
 
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Voted For: Daubs

This kid actin like he hard man u kno u wack alone
Wonderin y this bitch is scared he hides behind tha phone
^Nice but its not really a punch, I get where u was going^

Daubs? U painted ur picture wrong u mustve not had a lamp
Cuz ur like Jews ill leave u in the fuckin “Concentration” camp
^Nice bar, flowed well nice vocab an alright punch^

And u kno u aint neva hot cuz u allergic of the sun witout a tan
Cuz u playing soccer when u bring special deliveries like a pizzaman
^Ha ha nice witty close^
Pretty decent verse, I still feel u need to elevate your
writing when battling homies like Daubs. Punches didnt
really hit I felt had a few alright personals but it wasnt
like dame. Uping vocab and complexity...


I been here almost twice as long, and still got less posts than you..
But still your skills got more tacky edges..............than posters do..
^Ha ha nice opener, personal and punch. hit hard...

And sins-here.........nor there, he just aint sure about his sexuality..
Just watch me take his spinal chord...and snap him back into reality..
^Nice bar flowed well nice vocab pretty witty^

This is a two man race, and you wouldnt be ahead..by biting your cock..
I see your interests are writing,me too,look...........im writing you off..
^Nice close finshed the whole verse off nicely,.. Good
punch, flowed well decent vocab...

Vote ~ Daubs