it was definately cool at the start, because you were rhyming multi syllable words.......at the end there, you just keep rhyming seek and bleek, etc......sounded really dry......but not bad man, just expand your vocabulary to your verses, and creativity.......this woulda sounded better with a beat though, keep up man

rtf on this http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206108
or the one in my sig

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