i liked the end, i thought the flow hurt this, well the different flows of people....too many shifting, and it was hard to follow at times, but not bad, have a good idea.....the end was cool, i think just work on wording, and maybe vocab a little too, ......yeah, good job though, keep up

rtf on this

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206108

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