holy shit man i had no clue you could write this good, imagery is very good this piece is so creative omg, i know now you could beat me in a topical battle, anywho you had such good vocabulary omg, your flow was actually pretty good except for the end but thats cool man just if you wouldn't have rished it maybe, stucture was pretty good but what i really liked about this one was how you choose to use multiples like almost every line and you had a good rhyme scheme and some good emotion, damn man keep writin like this.

think you could rtf in my piece Frustrated Intensions links in the sig

1

__________________