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Old 08-30-05, 02:21 PM   #6
mizz fyre
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this drop had a very good concept....which i think you could have come more complex with....hook was decent as were the verses but you needed to up your vocab a bit more and work on your rhyme scheme.....i would have liked to see a verse three so you did well to capture the reader......overall 8/10.....look forward to reading more from you

rtf on my latest drop....dear summer
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