"Lullaby" - Intermental

Talking: (Baby Crying) Cmon baby dont cry, shh shhs shh, cmon baby, fuck this baby.....

Verse One:

Each slit on my wrist, represent the scars of my dick,
Eneterin that ho, ejaculating baby makin drips,
I ask, what was I thinkin, what was I drinking?
It was meant to be fun, I even had a cam filmin,
But all it captured was the dishonor of the rapture,
And the dismemberment of the holy pasture,
10 months on and a 2 month old baby in the cradle,
To the grave I go as this responsablity is fatal,
Im eighteen yrs old impregnated sum1 fifteen,
What does this mean, it means shes now a crack fene,
Ran off when she realised what hit her, it then missed her
And took down me, I cant take the cryin surroundin me,

Chorus:

Hush lil baby dont you cry,
Daddy will sing you a llulaby,
Hush lil baby dont you cry
Wipe the tears from ure eyes

Verse Two:

Hanging out at local liquor stores, buyin the juice,
It seems i need that speed cos i fuckin need a boost,
"drugs opress the people" this baby is opresin me,
I need 2 refresh my mentality, cos dis life's depresin me
Whilst I dream of contemplating the art of suicide,
I just want to fuckin put all my responsablities aside,
"Hes crying, Hes crying" thats all he fucking does
Why cant he jus stop and leave it to the doves,
Am i in earth or hell, Lord I jus cant fuckin tell,
Am I really thankfull for bein alive, good and well,
I dont think so, bury my sould, take me to the underworld,
Hurl me there, quickly, before the drama unfurls

Chorus:

Hush lil baby dont you cry,
Daddy will sing you a llulaby,
Hush lil baby dont you cry
Wipe the tears from ure eyes

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yo good flow nice emotion you should work on ya vocab a bit more but good drop felt it a lot liked the hook

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OYD MAFIA

thank you......................

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this drop had a very good concept....which i think you could have come more complex with....hook was decent as were the verses but you needed to up your vocab a bit more and work on your rhyme scheme.....i would have liked to see a verse three so you did well to capture the reader......overall 8/10.....look forward to reading more from you

rtf on my latest drop....dear summer

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I will do ma thanks for the feed

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Good Drop Man. For Sure..I Like It.

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Need Feed
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Summer Nights-Ft Troch
Super G's Ft Oreo

The Council
We'll Make You Eat Your Words.
Plus We've Got Ho's.

Chea nother intermenatl original huh

Ran off when she realised what hit her, it then missed her
And took down me, I cant take the cryin surroundin me,

chea


"drugs opress the people" this baby is opresin me,
I need 2 refresh my mentality, cos dis life's depresin me

emotion good, flows good try adding more metaphors and similes and sum internals and shit would be siiiiiiiiick, tight drop non the less g

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