Voted For: OneStepBeyond

v/OSB

because i thought he expressed the topic alot more creatively, vividly, imaginatively. i could really get more of a deep, lustful feeling in his; i was pretty much clinging to his verse, wanting to read more.....and thats a good gift to have when writing

tony, not that yours wasn't bad, you write with a basic style, and you express only from a single angle....you don't explore your thoughts as much, and provoke any more thought or feelings than you have to......and for me, i really look for topicals to enchant my mind, your story was touching.....but simple, it was nice......but i thought OSB took it, for complexity, creativity, originality, and overall enjoyment

v/OSB, props to both, keep up.

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