Structure was a problem fo me, it didnt let me create a flow in my head.....try and make lines end close to eachother.
Your vocabulary was not good, was simply wording...nothing was inhanced.
Your multis lacked presence dont feel they were good at all.
Concept was iight it wasnt all that bad...just mad simple....
Overall 4.5/10 keep elevatin and make sure u have those qualities in ur o/ms
along with emotion and imagery that helps a lot..........and u have to many akas now thats just whack
