Good pieces from the both of you, both had good approaches to the topic, imagery was on point, but felt that the vocab couldve been a little better. Critic, I feel that the ending of your peces couldve been worked on more,but the piece overall had good emotion and decent vocab. Althrough, im feeling Mystic Chaos verse more, had a nice, deep storyline, and had nice emotion. even though the vocab was a little basic, I felt that it sorta helped on the imagery.

V/Mystic Chaos

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