not bad bro. the topic was cool. i didnt like the whole cut a sentecne short to rhyme and continue it next line. it really throws the reader off. vocab and imagery werent bad. flow was alright. u dropped an okay piece. you started off great but all the cutting sentences short really fucked it up. keep droppin. pz

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