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Old 09-21-05, 11:55 PM   #2
Mentalz
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That was pretty decent man. A few things I think you could have elevated on would have been a little more vocab, flow wasnt to bad. However I think you could have really done alot better had you added more multies. I liked your structure and your style leaned a little more towards poetry. All in all nice drop man. Keep it up!
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