I'm not into Text much, but I have done it. First off I think your structure could use a little work, always helps. If you upped your vocab usage abit, you'd make the piece come across a little harder, toss in some nice multies and you're looking good an creative, with just a bit more work involved.

All in all, this was a good opener for your first RV drop (i'm assuming due to posts, might be an alias) correct me if i'm wrong.

Nice job man, keep it up.

Peace.

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