You don't suck..

but, I didn't like the stretched lines, you had some nice plays in this. some similes stood out. I wasn't really feeling your 2nd verse tho, thought the first one was much better.

Just keep writing, and work on ya bar length.. stay up homie

RTF if you wanna keep getting feed/votes from me- http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=211864