This was pretty good Fams. Firstly, one thing I found lacking was multies... I for one find a piece more involved when they're abundant. Your flow was on point and just... your vocab precise (if not misspelled.. haha) Structure was sound. However, so much detail and history is stored up in this topic... a topic openly discussed and used alot. The brevity of your piece, in my eyes, might have come across better had you delved deeper into it, no what i'm sayin'?

Overall, this was a good read... my favorite lines were:

"im continusily fixing the brainless problems created
all for a fucking world,filled people that seemingly hate it"
Excellant flow and you hit home with it precisely.

"I shall kamikaze myself,destroying all creation's
this is the truth,how i will carry out eternal damnation"
For me, this line portrayed chaos in its most simplist form... and one reason why we have problems today in terms of religion and terrorism.

Keep writin' fams.

Uppin' the piece to the top of the Chryme List.

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