This is only my second open mic since being back and the first one sucked severely, hopefully this aint as bad. Pls any feedback is greatly appreciated, even if its one or two words or just a little point or two .....anything


So reach with your hands up and tickle the clouds
Put the nimbus in your fingers and swirl it around
Should never let the tall walk be too far out of reach
Tweak things neatly -keep from sleeping on dreams
The lights need to be full beam, full steam ahead
The cool team can catch a worm without leaving their bed
Without turning their head, less yet breaking a sweat
Always remember lifes a game, like a big chess set.
If events stir up regrets and things stop making sense
Maybe get into learning, you’ll get nowhere being dense
Focus your mind and decide wats gonna be right
Take control of your life like you’re your own wife
At night time say your prayers, yeah! Like god cares?!?!
Its not god whos listening, but theres someone upstairs
Fuck god, its passed family and friends who be listening
God aint gonna push me even tho I had a christening
If theres one lesson readers take from a verse like this
Life will pass you by, grab it by the balls if ya wanna exist



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