oK,here's what.STOP with the multi internals.Your not using it right.It's ok to keep one scheme per line,but damn..not 2..lemme show u what I mean.

Read bottle labels and proceed to throttle fable and tries
To be like Shakespeare make fake fear this and denies

^See,the bottle label/throttle fable..shakespear/fake fear,made this bar sound like shit.Mainly becuz it wasn't the "end" rhyme of the bar.
U were rhyming try and deny..but,you decided to also rhyme bottle label/throttle fable..shakespear/fake fear.... IN BETWEEN..which is fucking annoying.STOP DOING THAT!.

ANd your whole fucking verse consisted of that.STOP with it.WHoever told that doing was dope is a stupid muther fucker.