liked the story that you told and how you broke it into sections your structure was good throughout decent sized lines
first section you have me interested lol i couldn't close this if i wanted to im hooked and now i have to read the others good imagery you have my head jumping to pictures and assumptions the last line got me hooked saw some good metaphores
My voice heard, spirits gather at my feet and begin the kidnapping
Resisting physical altercation, bleeding occuring due to lip chapping
loved that line
once again in this section you have me hooked lol
btu honestly i wasnt feeling this as much as the first section you had a few lines that were repetative but not too bad vocab was nice in this section again last line is making me want to read

liked these lines
No solution for my own drowsiness, its unknown how I will get sleep
Populations of cities completely asleep from being fed plants of lotus
and of course the last line lol
But now its time to sleep, when I wake we will start the reconstruction
this was the best section yet you took a turn that i didnt expect towards the end nice little twist very creative
Complete with thoughts of escaping this disaster, My mind draws a blank
Spirits unwind, suddenly relieve me from my emotional pain
Left as a normal human But still by myself I still remain
that ending was great i wasnt expecting it nice vocab and multis throughout this is one of the better pieces ive read only complaint was the repetativeness in the second section
overall good open mic

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