alrite im jus gonna leave simple feed here. the structure obviously was messy, it was different in all three verses, but thats kool, that doesnt affect the whole piece in my opinion. this was a good story, highly emotional and flowed well, nice twist on it. good job

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This is my sig. what?

I'm white so u KNOW i can't rap =)

I will definitely RTF if u leave a link, thanks!