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Old 12-10-05, 11:28 AM   #7
Mentalz
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Man, Emotional as fuck. I'm crying. Not really but you know.

It almost seems like yo wrote this one for a girl you've just met in real life... or is it just a random topical?

10/10 on the emotion.
Basic word play, see=me=be=tree ect. Up the vocab bro, though it didnt hinder the piece, the emotion made sure of that.

Your basic love song. Meh. Seen it, done it & abandoned it. Nice job though.

Not much else to say except up the wordplay, add some multies. Keep the emotion an' you're good.

Nice flow, but basic, ya know?

Keep it up man, long as fuck too.

Peace.
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