Nice Nice Nice.

You had wonderfull imagery, prob. the best thing about this piece.

You told the story well. You had a very vivid point. I like how u stuck to it, and kept it dope.Your vocabulary was exceptional and on point for this.
Your way to go OMG in your piece shows some emotion but not to the extent that you are capable of doing.
Keep doing your shit. Becuz this was dope 7/10 overall nice twist at the end. good job

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