Same concept as my Piece, Warriors of God. I liked your way of comming at it. Yah, the structure was a little fucked, but oh well. The content was worth the read. Man, chains of multies, and they wernt just random words like some folks on this site throw down to make it sound good.
My favorite lines were:
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"With Orders in forced-yaps! so they can raise their gauntlets! a cross praised n flaunted!,knights raised as rotton while sweat stains their cottons,their brains are haunted wit da greed to get fame thats wanted"
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^ Every word writen is truth.
People rant and rave about death tolls in the 1900's. Man, most have no fucking idea what Urban the II started. During the five crusades christians SLAUGHTERED the shit outa the jews and muslims.
Anyways, dope drop despite the structure.
I would suggest upping the vocab a bit, dropping the slang in some areas, restructuring in the future (I know it is an old piece) but maintain the flow you had going when you were actually doing it, the two italic verses.
Keep it up man.
Peace.