i always loved this beat..ehhh u pretty much talkin over the beat make sure ta add alot more emotion...lol u aint pathetic but i think u gotta prove a lil more that u got personailty....in a way u kinda sound like snoop dogg ....ur lyrics are ight..but u defitnly need ta get off that one syllable shit..u started rhymin "pass" wit "class"....u need some work ta do but otherwise this song was just ight only felt some parts of it and some u need ta work on....yo take this critism and make good use of it ...peace