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Old 12-11-05, 09:49 PM   #1
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Old 12-11-05, 09:59 PM   #2
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i always loved this beat..ehhh u pretty much talkin over the beat make sure ta add alot more emotion...lol u aint pathetic but i think u gotta prove a lil more that u got personailty....in a way u kinda sound like snoop dogg ....ur lyrics are ight..but u defitnly need ta get off that one syllable shit..u started rhymin "pass" wit "class"....u need some work ta do but otherwise this song was just ight only felt some parts of it and some u need ta work on....yo take this critism and make good use of it ...peace
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Old 12-12-05, 12:13 AM   #4
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ha i did a remix too this song before and it got 250 downloads a while ago.....lol i remember it liek it was yesterday...

Productionne of my fav. beats i've ever heard

Flow:your flow was aight...you got down ridin the beat tho

Emotion:you need too learn how too put more emotion into ya song and actually mean what your sayin sounds like ya just readin it

Pressense:Somthing u really lack .......i mean the only ttight parts on this song is the hook and beat......keep workin tho...

overall:you got lots of workin too do man..but u got potential..keep droppin those tracks man...:6/10
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Old 12-12-05, 02:33 AM   #5
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ur lyrics are aight u just need to Work on ur flow u rap like how i used 2 ahaha and thaz not a compliment try hard kid


Ayo get at me!!! and Return the FAVOR to my track!!!!!

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Old 12-12-05, 10:22 AM   #6
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I love ur voice...

hot

mic quality needs to be upped though


flow was kinda choppy...

man...all I kept hearin was Pacs flawless flow on this...U shudda just mirrored his flow


track needs work


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Old 12-12-05, 06:05 PM   #7
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yea I should have ay, I thought pac sounded wierd though on his first verse though.

but is cool thanks.

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Old 12-13-05, 03:54 PM   #8
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Beat choice is really good, some west coast flavor into it.

Good way to introduce the song. But you need a whole lot more emotion. In your verses, you was very monotone, which only works on more dreary beats. Your vocab is pretty decent, but your delievery is simple. You can only pull off simple flows when you add more emotion into your words. Try when you rap that your not just making a song, but your making a point to those who are listening the song. Overall, decent track, but up your emotion big time.

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Old 12-16-05, 08:15 PM   #9
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yea thanks man,

uppin.

and remember your friendly paranoid says "leave links"

ahh idk im high.
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Old 12-17-05, 10:36 PM   #10
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i wanted to use this beat

anyways....... u had good flow and ok presence...... pretty decent lyrics

everything is really comin together EXCEPT Emotion..... where the fuck is it???? ur half dead/half asleep on this track... which will leave me sleepin on u until u improve that...... u cant expect me to feel wat ur sayin if ur not puttin any feelin into it

overall decent track
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Old 12-20-05, 11:06 PM   #11
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well thanks, I'm workin on that emotion shit.
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