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Originally Posted by Aimez
My Clouded Mind
Worries, Troubles, Heart Aches and Pain
All of These subject define my brain
The feeling of depression driving me insane
The positive outlook on life I cannot attain
For demented and satanical thoughts cloud my brain.
- Oh My clouded mind
Sometimes my mind is also kind.
To let the good and perfect thoughts rewind
The heavenly hendurances that I try to find
As I cannot see God But I can hear, As so can the blind.
- oh My Clouded mind
I Have much hope yet I hold little faith
These pesamistic thoughts need to escape
I need to find my place in the race
For I am loosing and I feel no pity but disgrace
-Oh my clouded mind
Can divide, and add minutes of time
And It can find the multiplicative inverse of 79.
and It can learn new tricks and talents of the human kind
Nut it cannot help me with my Test through life, oh it's a crime
To have such a clouded mind
By Aimez
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hmmm.... nice piece..... i agree that the repetition was a nice touch, but this is one of those times when the rhyme is not neccesarily needed..... good piece that could be great if u don't let the rhyme scheme control u.... nice piece overall, i enjoyed it, keep writin playa.....
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