Welcome to Rv man. First off, I'd have to say this is more of an OM/Topical verse rather than a poem. I mean, you've got all kinds of internal rhyming and basic last syllable end rhyms... Just everything made this feel more like an OM. The content neverthe less was pretty nice. The concept itself is alittle played though... The whole 'Judging Eyes, Verbal Assault Upon The World', it's just been done oooooover and ooooooover and oooooover again. You really didn't do anything to out there or orignal either that could really define this as being YOURS. Overall, the content was ok but this piece really didn't stand out at all to me, it was just... There. And I really think this is more of an OM then anything else. Stay up and keep writing man.