I really liked this piece, and u did it in an hour, really good man. And on the real man, ur structure seemed fine to me. Vocab was good and it flowed nicely. Emotions and Imagery were crazy in this, really good. Like King Solo said it wasnt one of those basic love pieces, u put many different things into this one.My favorite lines:

a lone flower emerges, its deep crimson petals
offsets any doubts of life, keeping fate on the level
yeah, that was deep, but do you know how that happens?
i mass my love for you with passion, and flash it to action
into a fashionable attraction, surpassin' any faction
creatin enough traction, so love passes everlastin'
mathematical satisfactoin, i'm matchin your reactions
theres so many parts of you to like, i'll enjoy solving fractions

I thought thats was crazy, u had nice rhyming in there. I'd give it an 8/10, nice job man keep it up. Please RTF on Runnin'. Links in my sig. Peace.