yeah, this wasn't bad...except for the lone fact, that you kinda had some whack lines in there, and the story was a little eh, if you know what i mean....some cool lines, but i think just the enjoyment level was kinda abrupted by lines like this

i see this kid is not a coward and has so much free power
this is Susan Rightlist reportin for CNN now heres a kiss"

i think it was mainly the middle verse, because news reporters don't talk like that, lmao

cuz im runnin faster than track teams and i never joined

i liked that line, word, keep writing and you should have some serious potential, word up

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