very good, u put a lot of emotion and story into it without makin it really long (somethin i have to work on
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u have a lot of multis inside your rhymes which gives the piece good flow
u got great vocab too...
nice drop
RTF on my OM-
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=219595