…Great

Ok, you wrote this very well with a good choice of words, and really got your point of view across in the first part with great emotion, it was deep and to the point – it flows continuously, and almost sounds as though someone is actually speaking this and you are listening…the flow as mentioned was good, the multis were there – you managed to make this very effective with how you wrote it and the ending was great…did not expect it, but it complimented what you had written very well and this was all constructed good…very good vocab too, Imagery was there…definitely one of the best pieces I have read on here so far…

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